I wrote this ghazal. What do you think of it?

Sorry if audio isn’t up to mark, I didn’t have access to a much better microphone.

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Zbrdst bohat achii ghazal :clap::clap::clap::clap::clap:
How old are u??

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Zabardast :clap:

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good attempt. But you should have posted it in written form, bad narration has ruined its taste. (sorry … not an intent to let you down just a healthy criticism)

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21 this May if I survive the pandemic :laughing:

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No. It’s alright. Honest critique means most to me as it lets me overcome the shortcomings in future. I had 4-5 friends narrate it first, then my brother, but none of us likes poetry besides me, so that was even worse, hence, I had to narrate myself as a last resort.

And I fully realise it’s not as good as writing, maybe not even half good, as a writer I am totally aware recitation has never been my stronghold.

In sha Allah you will be …

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but I must say you have a strong hold on language … May Allah bless you even more

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InshaAllah talah, we’ll all make it through these testing times.

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Thank you, means a ton :slight_smile: